Tuesday, January 5, 2010

It's Tuesday! Yay! Sentences!

Scary-ish cattail photo. Sort of related in that the tale I'm reading features a cat.

I've taken a bit of a break from the Two Sentences Tuesdays, but I'm pleased to say I haven't taken a break from writing. Well, editing really. I'm nearly finished fixing the obvious errors in my vampire western. Soon I'll run out a hard copy and find what else is wrong with it.
It should be fun.

I'm currently reading a fantasy novel by Mercedes Lackey from her Elemental Masters series. It's No. five. I haven't read the other four, but I may have to now.
Here are two sentences from it.
In this scene the main character, and her maid, and the creature that lives in her kitchen have trapped a homunculus.

"Limping slightly, the cat leaped out the window, leaving the two young women and the brownie staring at one another.
'Well,' Ninette said, finally. 'Do you think we ought to put more heavy things on top of the pot?'

-Reserved for the Cat, Mercedes Lackey (Daw Books, Inc. 2007)

Here's a bit from my recent foray into correcting.
From Biting the Dust:

"Part of her wanted to hold Jemima Clayton and the other longed to sink her fangs into the beautiful slender neck and drink. Holding Jemima meant she'd be consumed by her. The other way meant she'd consume Jemima. Desire and death.
'Kiss or bite,' she muttered. She turned Hades to the valley and rode."

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Thanks for reading.


David Cranmer said...

Consume is one of those power words that really put descriptive bite into a vampire western.

the Bag Lady said...

Love the lines.
And am really looking forward to reading your vampire western!

Leah J. Utas said...

Thanks so much, David. *descriptive bite* love it.

dfBag Lady, you will, you will.

Clare2e said...

I don't think I can eat David's comment, I mean, beat.

messymimi said...

A vampire western!

I really have to see your books on my shelf someday.

Reb said...

Leah, the rest of that ML series is just as good. I'm with David on the use of 'consume' well said.

Leah J. Utas said...

Clare, you made me laugh. Thanks.

Messymimi, I want to see that, too.

Reb, good to know. I'm quite enjoying this one. Thanks re: 'consume.'

Terrie Farley Moran said...

df Leah,

Amazing indecision!!


Leah J. Utas said...

df Terrie, thanks so much.

Hilary said...

Sounds like you're moving right along with your vampire westering. Great title and intriguing sentences. I'm looking forward to more. :)

Leah J. Utas said...

It's coming along, Hilary. Thanks.

Nancy said...

I love it! "She turned Hades to the valley and rode..."

What was in that pot??

Leah J. Utas said...

Nancy, thanks.
The captured Homunculus was in the pot.