Tuesday, October 5, 2010

Two Sentence Tuesday - Making Me Think

Carrots- could they grow in a sea shell field?
As I've said in past weeks I'm rewriting my first manuscript. It's slow work and somewhat frustrating, rather like coaxing carrots to grow in a field of sea shells.
It's good practice, though, and a good exercise. It's also making me think.
Thinking's fine if I can get a break from it, but I'm reading an intense, thought-provoking book right now so there is no respite.
Two from my current read, Wally Lamb's I Know This Much Is True (Harper 2009)
"When  I go back to our dorm, I stood, bewildered, before our broken typewriter case--passed my finger over its sharp, smashed edge. Turned and stood there, studying my brother as he slept, mouth agape, eyes shifting behind the lids."
From my WIP The Legend of Shallal:
"It stirred her. Whispered a secret to her that she could not understand."
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David Cranmer said...

I'm hearing a lot of secrets these days that make little sense.

Fine lines, Leah.

Laurita said...

A fine two sentences.

Wally Lamb is always a great read, too.

Tabor said...

Waly Lamb is an intense writer. He knows women well. When you re-write do you have a formula? Are there certain things you do? Or do you just re-read it to your self and look for edits?

the Bag Lady said...

Love your lines. Have never read anything by Wally Lamb, but may have to do so.

Leah J. Utas said...

Sounds most interesting, David. And thanks.

Thanks, Laurita. I suspect he'll become a favourite.

Tabor, in this case I'm adding a character and recasting most of the sentences. The new voice will add so much, I think, that it means a complete overhaul of the manuscript.
In the other manuscripts I've mostly done clean up, but I may have to re-do at least one of them.
I've sent one out for others to read and I don't have all the feedback yet.

Thanks, Bag Lady. Lamb hits you on the head from the inside.

XD said...

I love Wally Lamb. I encourage everyone to read She's Come Undone! BTW, great blog.

Leah J. Utas said...

R.G., thanks. I'll see about more Lamb when this one's done.

Laura K. Curtis said...

Your sentences are delicious, and your veggies also look delicious!!

Leah J. Utas said...

Double thanks, Laura.

Reb said...

I like whispered secrets! Good lines. I'll have to see about reading Lamb also.

Nancy said...

It must the time of year for thinking. I've been caught up in it, myself.

Leah J. Utas said...

Reb, thanks. Reading Lamb is worth the investment.

Nancy, the cooler weather leads to introspection.

messymimi said...

Very good lines, from him and you.

Dawn said...

"Whispered a secret she could not understand..." THAT's how I feel (a lot lately!!)!
My favorite 2-sentences!

{It's ok to have your head hurt because you're thinking to hard...right?}

Have a wonderful "productive" day....

Leah J. Utas said...

Thank you, Messymimi.

Oh, my, and thanks Dawn. I suppose if your head must hurt that's a good reason.