Tuesday, September 22, 2009

Two Sentence Tuesday – Renovation

The two sentences I've read recently may not strike other readers quite the same.
That's fine. They sent me in to fits of barely contained laughter, but my sensibilities came warped right out of the original wrapping, and years of reporting made sure they stayed that way.
This will have to be from memory as I didn’t get a supporting photo, but from a sign in a grocery story currently undergoing an expansion:

“Due to renovations our bakery staff will not be visible.
We are sorry for the inconvenience.”
Now that’s one hell of a renovation.


The renovations I’m doing on my first fiction manuscript are nowhere near as extensive. I can still see the original form, but some passages bear little resemblance to their humble beginnings.
This is probably good.

Here’s a bit from The Legend of Shallal:

“Talking now was a way of distancing themselves, of returning to separation, of being their own being after the keenness of the session. The danger and excitement of being intellectual lovers seared through their Joining.”


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carla said...

it is probably good (in general :) not for your writing) but I find I like to return to the original messy state sometimes and reread anyway.

I love the rawness of it all.

Leah J. Utas said...

Totally see your point, Carla. I like to read the original at times, too.
It's a good way to be reminded of the original creative spark.

Hilary said...

Renovations or a magic act? I wonder if they can now make baked goods with invisible calories..

Terrie Farley Moran said...

df Leah,

Will the invisible staff bake invisible muffins?. AND will invisibility make the muffins calorie free?

"Intellectual lovers!" what a powerful reference!

I am linking to you at WoM right now.


Leah J. Utas said...

Hilary, let's hope that's the next renovation on the list.

dfTerrie, I believe it you can't see it, then it doesn't count.
Thanks for your kindness re: my words.

Clare2e said...

For being "intellectual love", this rest seems almost, dare I say, post-coital? Keep in mind, I think that's a good thing!

Leah J. Utas said...

Thanks. Good call, Clare. It sorta kinda is, but in the mind/spirit link sense.

messymimi said...

I love people with a warped sense of humor -- and those lines are priceless. Thanks for sharing that and your own words.

Leah J. Utas said...

Thanks, Messymimi. Glad to know there are others as twisted as I am.

the Bag Lady said...

What the heck? How did I miss commenting here this morning? Sheesh.

LOVE the idea of invisible people baking goodies with invisible calories!!

And your lines are scintillating. Is that the word I'm looking for?
(Hmm, perhaps the paint fumes are getting to me....)

Leah J. Utas said...

dfBag Lady, I wondered what had happened to you. Scintillating is a great word. It's exactly what you're looking for. Thanks.

I wonder what they'll make invisible next?

The Fifth Sparrow said...
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The Fifth Sparrow said...

Hi Leah, I love your way with words. You have a true gift. I can't wait to read your novel.

Your perspective on the seasons really was food for thought.

Edited because it is a true gift, not a ture gift.

Leah J. Utas said...

Oh thank you Fifth. You're very kind.

Reb said...

Oh, I want invisible baked goods! And an intellectual lover might be a lot of fun too :)

Leah J. Utas said...

Hey, Reb, invisible are best because the calories don't count.